The Greatest Country Music 5k Ever Created; But the Worst Email

by Lindy

Who else likes to proofread marketing emails at 6:00 a.m. just for fun? When trying to awake this morning, I scanned my email and stumbled on this gem – the ‘Greatest Country Music 5k Ever Created’. Of course I had to open it. And then, I was assaulted by spelling/punctuation/consistency/formatting issues.

Here is the email in question and my subsequent response to them. How many errors can you find?

“The Greatest Country Music 5k Ever Created!”
A new, unique 5k like nothing you’ve seen before! The event starts off with a new and exciting western themed 5k course. Then, the event turns into a big festival like atmosphere with great Country music, awesome games and activities like cornhole, line dancing, and our crazy cowboy hat contest! Of course we’ll have amazing country BBQ and ice cold beer to.

Like Our Facebook Page and Receive 20% Off
Use Promo Code “facebook” to receive a “early bird”
special of 20% off registration
DON’T WAIT!
This Event Will Sell Out!

 
Country Festival and 5k!

The Great Country Run So Cal! We have a deal for you! For a limited time registration is 20% off!  Don’t miss this offer!, here is a chance to capitalize on the ultimate “Ealry Bird” Special! You will not get a better deal than this! Like our Facebook page, Tell your family, friends, neighbors this deal will not last.  Promo code “Facebook” will get you 20% off registration! Promo Code Expires October 12th 2014.

The Great Country Run March 14th. 2015

The Great Country Run is for all ages. The course is 3.2 miles + western action (full 5K course), Celebrate at the The Great Country Run festival with family, friends, music, & beer where you can dance, listen to live music, enjoy BBQ, play games, and win contests!

Great Country Run video
The Great Country Run video

The Great Country Run | TheGreatCountryRun.Com

Copyright © 20XX. All Rights Reserved.

My email response:

There are several spelling errors in this email.
I can proofread it for you:

  • Country doesn’t need to be capitalized mid sentence (country music)
  • Too, not to. (Ice cold beer too)
  • Early, not ealry
  • March 15, 2015 (comma, not period)
  • Is the promo code facebook or Facebook? You have two versions listed; capitalized or lowercase?
  • No exclamation point before a comma
  • Comma after October 12 (not October 12 2014)
  • Copyright 20XX should be 2014

I like the concept of the race and I’m interested. Can I get a bigger discount for proofreading? 😉 I know you are trying to appeal to country lovers, but spelling and punctuation, attention to detail is still important.

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Would you run the Greatest Country Music 5k Ever Created? Would you run in cowboy boots? Of course I would; country costumes, beer, music, dancing…cornhole! Maybe there will even be moonshine! I can guarantee there won’t be any spelling bees, however, which is a shame, because you know I would totally win.

UPDATE: I received a response from the race promoter (after they sent out the same email again and I replied): “I am so sorry, we have been on the road for events. I know that’s not an excuse, but we will fix it before the next one, I promise!” Needless to say, I asked again for a race entry for compensation for my proofreading. I’m intrigued by this race!


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