Monthly Archives: September 2014

The Greatest Country Music 5k Ever Created; But the Worst Email

by Lindy

Who else likes to proofread marketing emails at 6:00 a.m. just for fun? When trying to awake this morning, I scanned my email and stumbled on this gem – the ‘Greatest Country Music 5k Ever Created’. Of course I had to open it. And then, I was assaulted by spelling/punctuation/consistency/formatting issues.

Here is the email in question and my subsequent response to them. How many errors can you find?

“The Greatest Country Music 5k Ever Created!”
A new, unique 5k like nothing you’ve seen before! The event starts off with a new and exciting western themed 5k course. Then, the event turns into a big festival like atmosphere with great Country music, awesome games and activities like cornhole, line dancing, and our crazy cowboy hat contest! Of course we’ll have amazing country BBQ and ice cold beer to.

Like Our Facebook Page and Receive 20% Off
Use Promo Code “facebook” to receive a “early bird”
special of 20% off registration
DON’T WAIT!
This Event Will Sell Out!

 
Country Festival and 5k!

The Great Country Run So Cal! We have a deal for you! For a limited time registration is 20% off!  Don’t miss this offer!, here is a chance to capitalize on the ultimate “Ealry Bird” Special! You will not get a better deal than this! Like our Facebook page, Tell your family, friends, neighbors this deal will not last.  Promo code “Facebook” will get you 20% off registration! Promo Code Expires October 12th 2014.

The Great Country Run March 14th. 2015

The Great Country Run is for all ages. The course is 3.2 miles + western action (full 5K course), Celebrate at the The Great Country Run festival with family, friends, music, & beer where you can dance, listen to live music, enjoy BBQ, play games, and win contests!

Great Country Run video
The Great Country Run video

The Great Country Run | TheGreatCountryRun.Com

Copyright © 20XX. All Rights Reserved.

My email response:

There are several spelling errors in this email.
I can proofread it for you:

  • Country doesn’t need to be capitalized mid sentence (country music)
  • Too, not to. (Ice cold beer too)
  • Early, not ealry
  • March 15, 2015 (comma, not period)
  • Is the promo code facebook or Facebook? You have two versions listed; capitalized or lowercase?
  • No exclamation point before a comma
  • Comma after October 12 (not October 12 2014)
  • Copyright 20XX should be 2014

I like the concept of the race and I’m interested. Can I get a bigger discount for proofreading? 😉 I know you are trying to appeal to country lovers, but spelling and punctuation, attention to detail is still important.

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Would you run the Greatest Country Music 5k Ever Created? Would you run in cowboy boots? Of course I would; country costumes, beer, music, dancing…cornhole! Maybe there will even be moonshine! I can guarantee there won’t be any spelling bees, however, which is a shame, because you know I would totally win.

UPDATE: I received a response from the race promoter (after they sent out the same email again and I replied): “I am so sorry, we have been on the road for events. I know that’s not an excuse, but we will fix it before the next one, I promise!” Needless to say, I asked again for a race entry for compensation for my proofreading. I’m intrigued by this race!


Unplugged: Scare Away the Dark

by Lindy

Howdy!

It’s been four months since I’ve written a blog post. No apologies or remorse. I’ve been immersed in living, working, vacationing, socializing, mothering, exercising, surviving.

Santa Cruz

In my element – the great outdoors! | Santa Cruz, CA

Many of my adventures are captured on Instagram for your perusal, but this has been a great year. Highlights from the past four months include:

  • Grand Canyon
  • Bedrock City (Flintstones)
  • Nashville
  • Dollywood
  • #LindysNautical40th – 40th birthday party!
  • Funniest Housewives of Orange County girls night out
  • Family Camp at Campland San Diego
  • Camp Pendleton Mud Run
  • Irish Fair Festival
  • Washington D.C.
  • Celebrating Fourth of July with my visiting Norwegian family
  • Donna’s Manhattan Beach birthday weekend
  • “Camp Annika” birthday party
  • Surgery
  • Week in Santa Cruz – AirBnB cottage
  • Family camp at Montecito Sequoia
  • San Diego family reunion weekend
  • Back to school
  • Job change
  • Frozen ice skating birthday party
  • Running the household solo for two weeks – the ultimate adventure

In the grand scheme of things, blogging (and podcasting) has taken a backseat to enjoying life and all its craziness. I do enjoy writing and publishing, so I’m not giving it up. Just not being as regimented. This new song by Passenger, Scare Away the Dark, so beautifully captures the importance of unplugging from technology and connecting with the outside world and people. Read the lyrics and see the video below.

Lyrics: Scare Away the Dark
well sing
sing at the top of your voice
and love without fear in your heart
feel, feel like you still have a choice
if we all light up we can scare away the dark

we wish our weekdays away
spend our weekends in bed
we drink ourselves stupid
and work ourselves dead
and all just because
that’s what mum and dad said we should do
but we should run through the forests
we should swim in the streams
we should laugh we should cry
we should love we should dream
we should stare at the stars
and not just at screens
you should hear what i’m saying
and know what it means to sing

sing at the top of your voice
and love without fear in your heart
feel, feel like you still have a choice
if we all light up we can scare away the dark

well we wish we were happier, thinner and fitter
we wish we weren’t losers and liars and quitters
we want something more not just nasty and bitter
we want something real not just hashtags and twitter
it’s the meaning of life and it’s streamed live on youtube
but i bet gangnam style would still get more views
and we’re scared of drowning and flyers and shooters
but we’re all slowly dying in front of computers so sing

sing at the top of your voice now
oh and love without fear in your heart
can you feel, feel like you still have a choice
if we all light up we can scare away the dark

oh oh oh oh oh oh oh oh oh oh oh

well sing
sing at the top of your voice
and love without fear in your heart
feel, feel like you still have a choice
if we all light up we can scare away the dark

Let me know what you do to unplug from computers and connect with the outside world.

Passenger’s new album Whispers is available on Amazon.com. You can even get it on vinyl with a free MP3 download to boot! I’m getting the vinyl for my Crosley retro record player.

Amazon Editorial Review:

“Mike Rosenberg, aka Passenger, presents Whispers, the follow up to 2012 s All The Little Lights, which featured the international hit single and 3x Platinum “Let Her Go.”

Recorded in Sydney and co-produced by Chris Vallejo, Whispers is comprised of 11 tracks that tell tales some real, some imagined of love, death, growing up and getting old. A master of story telling, Passenger yet again strikes the perfect balance between the heartbreaking and the humorous, all wrapped in beautiful instrumentation, creating a sumptuous, symphonic sound.

“This is easily the most “up” album I’ve ever made,” explains Passenger. “It s quite cinematic. There are lots of big stories and big ideas. There are also some somber moments about loneliness and death but, hey, it wouldn’t be a Passenger album without those. Mostly though, it s a really positive album.”

Lead single “Scare Away The Dark,” which is already a fan favorite at live shows, presents listeners with a different side of Passenger than the one they’ve come to know from international smash single “Let Her Go.” It s a riotous rant about technology taking over our lives, calling on listeners to seize the moment and embrace life. Though he didn’t realize it at the time, title track “Whispers” captures the chaos in Passenger’s head as “Let Her Go” began to snowball. “Heart’s On Fire” is the album’s grandest love song, starting sparse on finger picked guitar and building into a dramatic, passionate, strings-soaked plea to the person you can’t get out of your head.”


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